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Tuesday, January 06, 2009

Fear

Don't know what I am more
terrified of. Getting my heart
broken again or never letting
my heart
get broken again.

4 Comments:

Blogger ray said...

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5:48 PM  
Blogger I was Miss world said...

hi

5:53 PM  
Anonymous Ritwik Banerjee said...

I absolutely adore the crispness of your poems. You manage to convey a lot in very few words. Moreover, you manage to achieve that feat without compromising on the poetics.
I am not sure whether you are aware of this, but, "Fear" has a beautiful meter in the first three lines. The last two lines, albeit retaining the meaning completely, breaks this meter. May I suggest you change the format to:

"my heart get broken
again."

This way, you retain the message, the meter AND you gain the extra impact of that singular word on the last line: "again".

6:13 AM  
Blogger kaaju katli said...

Hey ritwik, thank you so much. Haven't written in a long while so a bit rusty. Your meter comment makes so much sense. Thanks!!

11:54 AM  

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